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 An icy death


The forlorn shadows of the troubled leaves danced in the sun’s yellow light,
As water stood placid,
Even with the roar of the winds,
For the top most layer of the water had frozen into dangerously thin ice, 
A crack appeared as a fish hit the layer of ice,
Slowly it all crumbled,
Falling down sharply leading to a fish’s partial demise,
As ice suddenly hit the bottom of the ocean floor,
There came a shark, sea carnivore,
It tore out the fish’s flesh before it could escape,
Blood seeped into the water,
As the fish was consumed whole.



-Vidhi Dasani.










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  1. This is amazing Vidhi. The way you write, it’s perfect!

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  2. This poem is much deeper than it appears! Very impressive for a teenager! Keep it up Vidhi!

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  3. You are an amazing writer and each word of this poem is deep. Keep going!

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  4. I loveeee the poem and the writing elements u used in it! I also love the way it shows winter in general in a different lighting which I find interesting and intriguing! Can’t wait for more! <3

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  5. No words to say Vidhi.
    -Adil

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  6. Wow beautiful poem VD! You wrote about something so simple but elaborated it beautifully. Feel bad for the fish tho πŸ₯²
    -Aadhya

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    1. Thank you! :D And I feel bad for the fish too but it's the natural cycle of life :((

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  7. It is a very beautiful poem with so much depth. I loved reading it.

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  8. What a beautiful poem. Love you my cutie 🧿🧿

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  9. Woah- this is so deep. This is an amazing peice :), I love the way you used this poem to convey something deeper than the surface. Great job!

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  10. That's such a good poem, loved it, it can be in an English textbook :) jk.
    Ur doing amazing vd

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  11. I FELL IN LOVE WITH YOU AGAINN.... AND I DIDN'T THINK THAT WOULD BE POSSIBLEEE...I LOVED IT SOO MUCH AND I MISS U LIKE CRAZYY😘😘😘😘

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  12. i am inspired by u.... teach me ur ways... ily (btw its a really good poem, just a sad story for the fish)

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  13. THIS IS AMAZING BABY GIRL!!! πŸ₯°πŸ₯°πŸ˜keep writing more like this

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  14. Ayyyyy that’s so goodddd

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  15. Such a captivating piece with such vivid imagery. The way fragility and tension have been woven together is so beautiful. Please never stop writing VD <3

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  16. You just keep getting better and better Vidhi! Love this poem.

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  17. vidhi this is so beautiful!!!!

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  18. That's just soo wow Vidhi!! πŸ”₯
    You are an Amazing poet!! πŸ‘
    Keep writing!
    - Gargi

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  19. Woah! This is so melancholy and beautiful. You definitely have a way with words Vidhi. I am looking forward for more poems from you!

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